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QUOTE (moor w rot @ May 12 2008, 03:30 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I like the fact you can use poetry to describe thing interesting ways. this is how I describe a polalitoin:

put a bullet in their head
because they are a wanka doodle wat wat
they have nothing much to say
with their droll dripping down
kissing the ground

i know it a bit blunt but it the way i want so people get where im coming from and how they pisses me of it still need some work on it.

Lmao.


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You, My Fortitude
I owe you...
my sanity
After all those years past,
you still offer your heart
I owe you...
my love
You always supported me
always helped me
always held my weight
and never buckled
You read my pain like a tattered book
You flattened my pages
You helped me find my place
My place is with you
returning what help & compassion
you gave me
I owe you...
sturdiness
I owe you...
a shelf of your own

this is a metaphysical poem that i wrote for extra credit in a British lit class. This poem has a few places tha want to publish it and other things, but whatever...
can't show the form in which i wrote it and would like for it to be seen

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Hmm... the thing I like about poetry is, among other things, its ability to flow around any form. As long as the author has some style...
It's strange to admit to writing poetry in this doomed anti-intellectual culture. I haven't really done it much, mainly while high and mainly for a class at school. But there is something cathartic about it when it's all said and done. An expression of a massive theme in a few words can be extremely satisfying if done correctly...
I have a very strange style, and I haven't really mastered the thing yet. But I figure there's a learning curve to everything. And I have to read these if I take this class anyway, so I suppose I shouldn't be worried about showing them in public. Poetry is similar to writing a song to be honest. And all my favorite poets have been the antithesis of the traditional "poet" image. Bukowski wrote about a particular form of love, true, and he wrote with what could be called beauty... but a smashed beer bottle covered in blood can be beautiful in the right light...



There they are in their weird glory. And about grammar... some of the best poets of all time (I'm thinking mainly e.e. cummings as the chief example) used grammar in very untraditional manners to create an effect. So incorrect grammar, when used correctly, is entirely appropriate. If you don't agree, then your life is far too contained to be writing poetry. To be frank. Poetry in its base sense is more natural than human anyway, like most of the "arts." And the English language is infinitely fallible and inconsistent. So to change it around to suit your own needs, like in music, should work fine. If, like in music, you know what is possible.
Also, MaxDamage... I like your stuff man. Moar?

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QUOTE (Pawnator @ May 13 2008, 10:39 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Lmao.

what it is not as lame as saying they are wanker straight up. i like to see you come up with a creative insult. rather than lmoa. it just suppose to be slightly funny.

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QUOTE (MaxDamage @ Jul 17 2008, 01:40 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Enraged, encaged,
Open, broken,
Soulless, spineless,
Ball-less, brainless,
Hopeless, helpless,
Useless;
And getting used to this.

These are all the things you are;
All the things you gave me.

Parasite.
Fucking Parasite.

I'm rid of you.


straight the grim depressing point. i cant understand why people like to be sheep either. heres my own the topic it is sonnet i think.

survival in the shadow of an idol

Wondering aimlessly amongst the trees
Chasing after a menacing idol
This is believed to be survival
Reinforced by the barbaric breeze
Causing all soul to freeze
Making us in a sense suicidal
Yet still in a illusion this is delightful
Because it puts your mind at ease
All this robbing you from your identity
Breaking every bone that lies in your spine
Digging your own grave in the cemetery
I stand here and watch your reality unwind




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Shitcha this thread is back, where we can all be a little bit manlier by shedding excess hatred in the form of poignant verse. And it's weird to me, Mr. Damage, if I can be selfish and discuss your critiques right off the bat, that you chose that part of that bus lady bit to label "too extreme." I always liked that one because it got the point across with the last line.
She's at a bus-stop and life generally sucks. The end.
But each to their own, individual interpretation and all that.
How about...



Yeah... I'm on vacation in Mexico right now... figures... must be the sun-burn.

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Bump! FOR GREAT JUSTICE ARGHH!

Here's an untitled one I made quickly:

Tormenting treachery unveils,
as I stumble upon the eye-hidden.
In the pale darkness of a concealing dawn
and as unexpecting scoundrels mind their buisness,
like the shadowed face of the moon
and its tender completing smile,
I am granted true sight to the value of my bond.

Regrets flow by my spyglass,
Scrupules of forfeited fortune,
a perforated flag now turned to white.
I surrendered to my own demise.

But you, headless harvester,
You are worth but the weight of your own lies,
Within which you hid malvolently
Lurking for the loot of longings.
Not me.
"Something tremendously powerful was lost when composers moved away from tonal harmony and regular pulses... Among other things the audience was lost" -John Adams

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QUOTE (MaxDamage @ Sep 1 2008, 07:54 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Kinda classical language Verr, but cool.


Yeah, that's what I like in poetry. Diverse vocabulary and abusive figures of speech icon_razz.gif
"Something tremendously powerful was lost when composers moved away from tonal harmony and regular pulses... Among other things the audience was lost" -John Adams

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QUOTE (MaxDamage @ Sep 3 2008, 12:15 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
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That was pretty interesting, nice.

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Okay, this is from my depressed moment in my life.

When your all alone
With no lights to save you
You feel cold and dark,
Your mind, Lost in itself,
Your Heart Surrounded by Darkness
What is there left to do?

Growing in the depths of your heart,
You feel a sudden chill,
You wake up, Falling
As you fall,
your heart grows darker and darker
Until there is nothing left but black.

You wake up, feeling cold
You feel like your heart is Dissapearing
Your mind feels like it's killing itself
As the darkness leaves, you start to feel warm
The pain goes away, your mind finds itself
Your heart looses it's darkness.

When your all alone
You feel cold and dark,
Your mind, Lost in itself,
Your Heart Surrounded by Darkness
What do you do?
You wait, just wait.



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